题目：The best way for government to solve the problem of traffic congestion is to provide free public transports in 24 hours per day, and seven days a week. Do you agree or disagree?
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第一句
However, there are better ways to reduce the number of cars on the road.
Comment:很好的topic sentence 没问题
第二句
One solution is to increase the gas price, which would make those who are price-sensitive choose to travel by public transport instead in order to save money.
Comment: 没问题
第三句
Another effective way to solve traffic congestion is to develop new routes of a city’s public transport.
Comment:
新的城市公共交通路线写 new public transport routes
更好的句子
Another effective way to solve traffic congestion is to develop new public transport routes
第四句第五句
This is because many people who live in rural areas travel by cars because they have no better alternatives. If there were easy access to public transport, they would give up their cars and take a metro or a bus instead.
Comment: 没问题
结尾
In conclusion, although providing free public transport can be effective in solving traffic congestion, I believe increasing the gas price and developing new routes for public transport would be much better approaches to this problem.
Comment: 没问题
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