Topic:
Many young people spend more free time in shopping malls. It make negative effects on both the young people and the society they live on. Do you agree or disagree?
introduction:改写题目,同意
Body1:当年轻人花更多的时间在shopping mall时,就有可能对很多物质商品感兴趣而想购买,
这个过程就有可能变得materialism,而大部分的年轻人通常没有太多的钱,可能不能afford一些价格高的东西,这就会导致觉得自己没有比别人优秀,就降低了他们自己的self esteem。当年轻人变得materialism,就有可能根据别人拥有的物质产品去平价这个人,就有可能看比起那些不喜欢shopping的同伴,别人就会觉得自己没有收到拥有的respect 甚至觉得收到了其实,没有办法relate to each other,
这样就容易产生conflict,
Body2:当年轻人受到商品的诱惑越来越大,而自己买不起时,他们有可能采取一些不正当的手段去获得他们买不起的东西, 比如robbery,这个过程就有可能导致其他民众受到来自身体和钱财上的损失,这样就会导致犯罪率升高,社会就会变得不安全,其他人们就不愿意到商场来, 当商场里的消费者减少时, 商家的生意就会减少,盈利就减少,经济就不能得到发展。
conclusion:as discussed above,年轻人花更多的时间在shopping mall 会使他们降低self esteem,产生conflict,还会是社会变得不安全,影响经济发展
Recently, there is a phenomenon that more and more young people spend more leisure time in shopping centers and people believe it will bring negative impacts for both young people and society. I agree with this view.
When the young generations stay in shopping malls for an extended period, they would be more likely to be attracted by the products displayed in the shops and desire to buy more material goods, becoming materialistic. Since most young people don't have sufficient money, they might not be able to purchase products they like and probably regard themselves as not as successful as others, which will significantly lower their self-esteem. Meanwhile, those materialistic young people may tend to judge others based on the material products they have, making others feel disrespectful or even biased. It may raise misunderstanding and conflict.
It also has negative impacts on society. Facing these valuable products which the young people could not afford, they may probably try to get them in illegal ways, such as steal or robbery. If this is the case, the social crim rate will be increased, and the society that they live in will become unsafe. The other customers may be afraid to go shopping because of the potential crime caused by young people. Once the number of customers dropped, the shopping malls would suffer from business reduction. As a result, the economic development of the society will be influenced.
As discussed above, young people should not spend a lot of leisure time in shopping centers because it may raise conflict among individuals and affect economic development.
Lynn Yang
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