【写作练习2】现在许多国家有来自不同国家和民族的人，这是好的还是不好的现象

写个post，作为自我反省纠错的记录，也记录审题过程的内心想法，方便持续改进。
这是Lynn L188免费课视频里的一道题。刚看到题，立马想到：题目是一种直观的好现象并非观点，两段立论结构，两个body段写两个原因(B1 by contrast; B2 A->B->C) 最最common的组合了。然后开始想逻辑链，唯一想到的就是difference-empathy-cohesive society/sense of belonging (我现在最大的问题，还是不知道如何用好那些“零碎”逻辑链，不知道怎么在脑子里进行组合。单看那一页25个逻辑链的sheet, 觉得很难理解）。接着就是硬着头皮写。

总体写下来，非常不顺畅，遇到idea卡壳，思路模糊的情况，中间几个段落和句子都换了几次顺序才理顺关系，自然也超时了。第一段的第一句和第二段的第一句，就是我写完整篇的时候调换了顺序。第三段其实是放第二段写的，因为最先想到的逻辑链，最先写；到写第三段的时候，就自己想idea了，也就是这里出现混乱卡壳，耗时间的情况。这段按理应该写一个原因就好了，但是当时费力地想到技术移民和投资移民，就把两个放在一个段落里写，好吃力。总感觉还差一点熟练度，关键还是要熟练掌握逻辑链的使用。

正文：

Today, a lot of nations open their arms to embrace worldwide people, such as immigrants, talents, and technicians.（题目改写，将people关键词直接具体化，其实感觉也可以放到第二段第一句） I firmly believe that this is a positive tendency.

这里想用模板来展开：核心词-题目现象-结论
With the development of globalization, many countries are welcoming people around the world.（核心词/题目现象） Accepting people from other countries and ethnic groups could, to some extent, boost domestic economic and technological development.（第一个原因） For example, the developed countries would attract immigrants who have prominent financial bases or enough wealth at their disposal. These people would make investments in local estates and properties, which could contribute to the improvement of income for the country. So it is helpful for the country’s economy.（举例） Besides, if the country doesn’t have enough talents in the technology area in the domestic employment market, it is quite necessary and convenient to acquire the foreign dedicated skillful talents who would like to devote their experience and skills.（第二个原因 就40个词）

Also, having people from various countries and ethnic groups could create an international setting for local citizens to get exposed to those people with diverse cultures and living environments. By interacting with the foreigners, they are able to realize and respect the existent distinctions in aspects of mindsets and lifestyles; they could gradually get used to it, and cultivate empathy. In their later life, they could put themselves in others’ shoes, and relate to others, which could bring about a more cohesive society.（逻辑链很顺就下来了，但没凑够100词 只有83词..）

As discussed above, possessing people from other nations can boost a country’s economy by attracting more wealthy immigrants. On the other hand, it can foster the citizens’ empathy, and build a more harmonious society.