By Marcus Ha on 2022年9月11日, 星期日
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When a new town is planned, it is more important to develop public parks and sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is said that when a new town is developed, public parks and sports facilities take priority over shopping malls for people to spend their leisure time. I strongly disagree with this statement because I suppose that all of it should be developed in a new town.
It is imperative to construct some public parks and sports facilities in a new town. The reason is that many public parks have a lot of grasslands and the view is really attractive, the sports facilities are accessible easily. If both of them are built, people will go there to exercise. When we do physical activities regularly, this may strengthen our immune system, decreasing our risks of suffering from cardiovascular diseases and obesity.
In addition, it is also essential to construct shopping centers in a new town. Because there are various products and entertainment activities in it. If shopping mall is built, people will go shopping and taste these activities when they have free time, thus maybe they will refresh mind and let off steam. When we are relaxed, it is easy for us to associate irrelevant ideas together, thus creating original work. This process can cultivate creativity. And more importantly, based on lots of scientific researches, it will take us less time to comprehend knowledge when we loosen up, we may study or work more efficiently.
As Discussed above, all of them have the equal status in a new town, constructing public parks and sports facilities will make people healthier and shopping centers will improve people’s creativity and efficiency.
Body 1: 没有"free time"的对应词, 字数和B2不平等啊

The reason is that many public parks have a lot of grasslands and the view is really attractive, the sports facilities are accessible easily
语法,逗号不能链接2个 independent clause

If both of them are built, people will go there to exercise.
应该是2nd conditional , 语法不对哈。。


Body 2: shopping mall - relaxed
核心词现象不是独一无二的属性
运动也可以relaxed
为什么一定要通过shopping mall 实现relaxed ?
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大约1年前
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shopping center的核心词我觉得应该是:里面有很多的产品,和里面有很多的娱乐场所。
如果shopping center被建成,人们就可以在他们空闲时间里去买他们需要的东西,还可以在去这些娱乐场所打发free time。在购物和去这些娱乐场所玩的时候,让他们短暂地忘记生活当中的烦恼,人们就会觉得relaxed。


那...Lynn老师,这样写的话可以吗
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大约1年前
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shopping center的核心词我觉得应该是:里面有很多的产品,和里面有很多的娱乐场所。
如果shopping center被建成,人们就可以在他们空闲时间里去买他们需要的东西,还可以在去这些娱乐场所打发free time。在购物和去这些娱乐场所玩的时候,让他们短暂地忘记生活当中的烦恼,人们就会觉得relaxed。

那...Lynn老师,这样写的话可以吗




Body 1: 没有"free time"的对应词, 字数和B2不平等啊

The reason is that many public parks have a lot of grasslands and the view is really attractive, the sports facilities are accessible easily
语法,逗号不能链接2个 independent clause

If both of them are built, people will go there to exercise.
应该是2nd conditional , 语法不对哈。。


Body 2: shopping mall - relaxed
核心词现象不是独一无二的属性
运动也可以relaxed
为什么一定要通过shopping mall 实现relaxed ?
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大约1年前
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