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  2020年9月12日, 星期六
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通过Lynn的直播课了解到 考完一定要去查看自己的review

找找去网站上找,找到了

发在这里给大家打个样吧。。。 顺便麻烦老师看看我的改进在哪:D :D

Writing
6.0
Test takers at this band can typically address all parts of the question, some more fully than others.

(AC) They can give an overview.

(GT) The letter has a generally clear purpose; the tone is sometimes not consistent.

Key features and bullet points are covered. The point of view and main ideas are relevant but the conclusion(s) may be unclear. Some details might be irrelevant or wrong. Test takers can arrange their ideas logically, so that the writing has a clear progression from start to finish. They are able to use some linking words well, but others with mistakes. They can paragraph their Task 2 writing, although not always logically. They have enough vocabulary to answer the question. They try to use some less common words. They make some spelling mistakes, but the reader can still understand. They can write a mix of simple and complex sentences. The grammar and punctuation mistakes do not usually cause difficulty for the reader.
大约1年前
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#1223
the tone is sometimes not consistent. 小作文我以前也得到过这样的评语。小作文有formal 和 informal 的 (当然也有semi formal 先不讨论),这两个letter用的tone是不一样的,自己感觉一下

Dear Mr. Z,

I am wrtting to 。。。。 Could I xxxxx ?

I look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely,

Given name + Surname

----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Hello Johnny,

I heared you just got a offer from xxxx. Congratulations! I'm visting the city of ...., If you're free, we can hang out togher and have a cup of drink.

Best,

Given name.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

你的大作文问题比较的多
逻辑不正确,论据不能支持论点。 transition的连词用的也不对(只on the other hand, furthermore, moreover) 这些,当然我不知道你用什么了你还用了一些 less common words (雅思作文考高分并不是必要), 并且有拼写错误。

看Lynn的视频,训练下逻辑或许对你有帮助。Logic是主要错误, 是第一重要的

个人意见,我不是tutor.

Good luck.
大约1年前
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#1224
补充一下, tone is sometimes inconsistent 就是你两种语气在文章中都出现过。
Johnny Z 他们的回复 应该已经搬到你了哈

我只是补充

1. task 2 占了 2/3的分数 如果你是6分 你的task 1 tone 错了,改了tone 就是6.5 了 所以小作文 改了tone 就OK了
推荐的资料:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zRiY9bs49HM
视频里有提到 怎么区分 也有下载的范文哈


2. 大作文的逻辑是主要问题


Key features and bullet points are covered. The point of view and main ideas are relevant but the conclusion(s) may be unclear.

- Task Response: 评分标准说, conclusion 写不好 直接6分了? TR这个项目说的 你对着评分看看-attachment


Some details might be irrelevant or wrong.
- Task Response : irrelevant idea 你的TR可能是6 也有可能以下

Test takers can arrange their ideas logically, so that the writing has a clear progression from start to finish.
-逻辑推倒没有问题,但是你的main idea,就是上面的评语,出现了问题 所以整体分数低
就是,大家写逻辑的body 段落的主要内容
你写了一个 不想关的内容

They are able to use some linking words well, but others with mistakes.
-Coherence/Cohesion/Grammar: 链接词 错了

They can paragraph their Task 2 writing, although not always logically.
- TR/CC: 结合上面的irrelevant ideas, 我猜你可能2个段落 的链接出现了问题,不是段落内部的问题

They have enough vocabulary to answer the question.
-Vocabulary : 词汇OK 很少有人考不到7 是词汇问题
They try to use some less common words. They make some spelling mistakes, but the reader can still understand.
-拼错了 不影响你考7

They can write a mix of simple and complex sentences. The grammar and punctuation mistakes do not usually cause difficulty for the reader.
-Grammar: 6-7之间

所以,你主要提高:
1. 逻辑+语法的准确性; 句子的多样性 没有问题
2. 小作文的tone
大约7个月前
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#2556
在哪里看review?每次考试都有么?
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